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Peter Whisenant's avatar

"where entropy, like accident, designs

a quiet, more compliant congregant."

You, sir, are quite the craftsman. Bravo!

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J. Tullius's avatar

Much appreciated!

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Olivia Marstall's avatar

Both the language and the storytelling here are great! It reads beautifully.

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Zane Paxton's avatar

Great language!

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Nick Chapman-Jones's avatar

Inspiring in its imagery.

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James Hart's avatar

Love the transition in the end from observation to context:

"Among the wreckage, dawdling unseen

where mammals chew their mediocre cud,

a stubborn Adam burnishes the name

embossed upon a retroreflective sign

to mark his scrapheap garden Somewhere still."

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J. Tullius's avatar

Thank you James.

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